Reviewer: ansinico
Date: 09 Aug 2013 09:55 am Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningWell l stayed the course and very much enjoyed the tale and your imagination, being an old traditionalist l think maybe that you have changed my opinion somewhat.The dialogue, confusions and action made for an extremely interesting read…sometimes, and me being a Joegal l felt like giving LJ a slap, but only coz the making up would be kinda nice.l loved the relationship that developed between Adam and Hoss…Bluewindfarm you made the separation between Ben and Adam feasable and completely believable.Thanks very much.
Date: 09 Aug 2013 09:55 am Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningWell l stayed the course and very much enjoyed the tale and your imagination, being an old traditionalist l think maybe that you have changed my opinion somewhat.The dialogue, confusions and action made for an extremely interesting read…sometimes, and me being a Joegal l felt like giving LJ a slap, but only coz the making up would be kinda nice.l loved the relationship that developed between Adam and Hoss…Bluewindfarm you made the separation between Ben and Adam feasable and completely believable.Thanks very much.
Author’s Response:Ansinico, I’m glad you ‘stayed the course’ and read to the end. I believe I’m a traditionalist, but sometimes ideas just come that take me in a different direction. Yes, I do believe there were several times where Joe deserved a slap, if only for the making up afterwards (tee hee he). Even with the circumstances as they were, I felt Adam’s character was true to the Adam of the series, whether a younger brother or not, Adam would be there to watch out for them. Aren’t we just glad that Adam felt that way in San Francisco?Thank you for taking the time to read and letting me know how you liked the story. It is appreciated.
Reviewer: ansinico
Date: 08 Aug 2013 04:00 pm Title: Chapter 1 — San Francisco ConfusionDidn’t think l would get into this story, usually like my BZ to be traditional but l am very much enjoying it, and want to see it out.
Date: 08 Aug 2013 04:00 pm Title: Chapter 1 — San Francisco ConfusionDidn’t think l would get into this story, usually like my BZ to be traditional but l am very much enjoying it, and want to see it out.
Reviewer: Kaci
Date: 12 Jun 2013 12:11 pm Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningThe interaction between the family was perfect. It worked with Adam being raised by his Granfather Stoddard with the Adam we see in the series. The story we see in the first eps.would have aligned. Love Joe….who always thinks every crisis is about him. 🙂 Excellent story.Author’s Response:Thank you for the review. I honestly felt that whether he was raise by Ben or by Abel, Adam would be the Adam we knew. Every crisis is about Joe, isn’t it? (Too funny ;0)
Date: 12 Jun 2013 12:11 pm Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningThe interaction between the family was perfect. It worked with Adam being raised by his Granfather Stoddard with the Adam we see in the series. The story we see in the first eps.would have aligned. Love Joe….who always thinks every crisis is about him. 🙂 Excellent story.Author’s Response:Thank you for the review. I honestly felt that whether he was raise by Ben or by Abel, Adam would be the Adam we knew. Every crisis is about Joe, isn’t it? (Too funny ;0)
Reviewer: Dodo
Date: 11 Jun 2013 01:19 pm Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningA wonderful finale! Peace and quiet at last on the Ponderosa…for now! Great epic story BWF – you did yourself proud with this fanfic. Award yourself a gold star!
Author’s Response:I’m so glad you enjoyed yourself this evening by reading my story, and I’m thrilled with your reviews. Thank you so much.
Date: 11 Jun 2013 01:19 pm Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningA wonderful finale! Peace and quiet at last on the Ponderosa…for now! Great epic story BWF – you did yourself proud with this fanfic. Award yourself a gold star!
Author’s Response:I’m so glad you enjoyed yourself this evening by reading my story, and I’m thrilled with your reviews. Thank you so much.
Reviewer: Dodo
Date: 11 Jun 2013 01:11 pm Title: Chapter 6 — It Should Have Been Smooth SailingNo one said having a little brother would be easy! And don’t Adam know it! Another absorbing chapter of Cartwright life.
Date: 11 Jun 2013 01:11 pm Title: Chapter 6 — It Should Have Been Smooth SailingNo one said having a little brother would be easy! And don’t Adam know it! Another absorbing chapter of Cartwright life.
Reviewer: Dodo
Date: 11 Jun 2013 01:01 pm Title: Chapter 5 — Coming TogetherJust loving this saga. Just hope Adam knows what he’s let himself in for.
Date: 11 Jun 2013 01:01 pm Title: Chapter 5 — Coming TogetherJust loving this saga. Just hope Adam knows what he’s let himself in for.
Reviewer: Dodo
Date: 11 Jun 2013 12:53 pm Title: Chapter 4 — Could it Get Any Worse?No matter what they throw at those Cartwrights, they bounce back! Thank goodness!! Another fascinating chapter which smooths the way for the three brothers to be together at last.
Date: 11 Jun 2013 12:53 pm Title: Chapter 4 — Could it Get Any Worse?No matter what they throw at those Cartwrights, they bounce back! Thank goodness!! Another fascinating chapter which smooths the way for the three brothers to be together at last.
Reviewer: Dodo
Date: 11 Jun 2013 12:39 pm Title: Chapter 3 — What’s the Worst that Could Happen?Phew – what a heart-wrenching chapter for Ben! Can’t imagine what he must have felt when realising his first born was not dead but there on the ranch! You’ve kept my interest and the suspense of the story has me hooked!
Date: 11 Jun 2013 12:39 pm Title: Chapter 3 — What’s the Worst that Could Happen?Phew – what a heart-wrenching chapter for Ben! Can’t imagine what he must have felt when realising his first born was not dead but there on the ranch! You’ve kept my interest and the suspense of the story has me hooked!
Reviewer: Dodo
Date: 11 Jun 2013 12:23 pm Title: Chapter 2 — It Was Supposed to be a Simple Trip HomeTrouble seems to follow those Cartwrights wherever they go! But at least the three brothers are together, facing what hits them. Great read.
Date: 11 Jun 2013 12:23 pm Title: Chapter 2 — It Was Supposed to be a Simple Trip HomeTrouble seems to follow those Cartwrights wherever they go! But at least the three brothers are together, facing what hits them. Great read.
Reviewer: Dodo
Date: 11 Jun 2013 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 1 — San Francisco ConfusionWhat an enjoyable read and such a different concept as to Adam’s early years! Joe and Hoss certainly have a surprise coming, and as for Ben!!!!
Date: 11 Jun 2013 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 1 — San Francisco ConfusionWhat an enjoyable read and such a different concept as to Adam’s early years! Joe and Hoss certainly have a surprise coming, and as for Ben!!!!
Reviewer: Cheaux
Date: 09 Jun 2013 02:54 pm Title: Chapter 1 — San Francisco ConfusionI enjoyed this story, especially the first few chapters. Your inclusion of nautical terminology lent an air of authenticity to Adam’s world. Seems to me there are more tales to be told in this universe and I hope to read more from you.Author’s Response:Thank you for reading and reviewing. It was fun researching for certain parts of my story. I’m sure there will be more stories from me, and it seems like I’ll also need to continue with this ‘new’ reality.By the way, Thank You very much for reminding me of the etymology of certain words I originally used within my story. I forgot to ‘research’ that aspect of my story.
Date: 09 Jun 2013 02:54 pm Title: Chapter 1 — San Francisco ConfusionI enjoyed this story, especially the first few chapters. Your inclusion of nautical terminology lent an air of authenticity to Adam’s world. Seems to me there are more tales to be told in this universe and I hope to read more from you.Author’s Response:Thank you for reading and reviewing. It was fun researching for certain parts of my story. I’m sure there will be more stories from me, and it seems like I’ll also need to continue with this ‘new’ reality.By the way, Thank You very much for reminding me of the etymology of certain words I originally used within my story. I forgot to ‘research’ that aspect of my story.
Reviewer: jfclover
Date: 09 Jun 2013 11:41 am Title: Chapter 1 — San Francisco ConfusionVery interesting concept, BwF, an enjoyable story to read with a truly different idea that begs us to wonder how the C’s will cope with this situation. The brothers’ relationships sort of fell right into place as if nothing had been out of the ordinary for 17 years. Noce job!Author’s Response:Thank you for reading and reviewing. I too wonder how the C’s will cope… I’m glad you enjoyed how I wrote of the brothers’ relationships, it just seemed natural for it to happen that way… But believe me, should I choose to write more of this alternate reality, I’m sure the road will become rocky before it settles in again.
Date: 09 Jun 2013 11:41 am Title: Chapter 1 — San Francisco ConfusionVery interesting concept, BwF, an enjoyable story to read with a truly different idea that begs us to wonder how the C’s will cope with this situation. The brothers’ relationships sort of fell right into place as if nothing had been out of the ordinary for 17 years. Noce job!Author’s Response:Thank you for reading and reviewing. I too wonder how the C’s will cope… I’m glad you enjoyed how I wrote of the brothers’ relationships, it just seemed natural for it to happen that way… But believe me, should I choose to write more of this alternate reality, I’m sure the road will become rocky before it settles in again.
Reviewer: Laurie
Date: 07 Jun 2013 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningQuite a story, hope there’s more, thanksAuthor’s Response:Thank for reading and reviewing. I’ll have to see what else my writing muse can inspire along the new lines of the new ‘oldest’ brother.
Date: 07 Jun 2013 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningQuite a story, hope there’s more, thanksAuthor’s Response:Thank for reading and reviewing. I’ll have to see what else my writing muse can inspire along the new lines of the new ‘oldest’ brother.
Reviewer: BettyHT
Date: 06 Jun 2013 11:08 am Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningWonderful story about assimilating the missing brother into the family and the repercussions of that.Author’s Response:Thank you for reading the story to its conclusion, I’m sure that I’ve only scratched the surface of the repercussions the Cartwrights will face.
Date: 06 Jun 2013 11:08 am Title: Chapter 7 — The Truth and a New BeginningWonderful story about assimilating the missing brother into the family and the repercussions of that.Author’s Response:Thank you for reading the story to its conclusion, I’m sure that I’ve only scratched the surface of the repercussions the Cartwrights will face.
Reviewer: BettyHT
Date: 06 Jun 2013 10:26 am Title: Chapter 3 — What’s the Worst that Could Happen?Now that was powerful emotional — and I loved the ending of this section.Author’s Response:Betty, Thank you for reading and reviewing. I’m glad you enjoyed my story. I hadn’t planned on the ending happening like this, but my writing muse kept whispering and I kept writing.
Date: 06 Jun 2013 10:26 am Title: Chapter 3 — What’s the Worst that Could Happen?Now that was powerful emotional — and I loved the ending of this section.Author’s Response:Betty, Thank you for reading and reviewing. I’m glad you enjoyed my story. I hadn’t planned on the ending happening like this, but my writing muse kept whispering and I kept writing.
Reviewer: BettyHT
Date: 06 Jun 2013 09:27 am Title: Chapter 1 — San Francisco Confusion
What an intriguing storyline — you got me hooked!
One my list of favorites….definitely…love Adam in the protective fatherly role to Joe….awesome story!!!!!!
I am not one normally for AU stories, but you keep the brothers true to character and it works. Very interesting tale, though poor Joe certainly had more explosive ups and downs than normal. Enjoyed it.
What a well written story. Loved the alternative and how it all worked out.
prlee, I’m glad you enjoyed my story. Thank you for taking the time to read and to leave a comment.
What an intriguing and unique take on what might have been. I would enjoy seeing more stories exploring this AU, and particularly to see something involving a return of Ben’s “friend” who had been integral to the separation. I’d love to learn about his motives and what he might do now that a tragic wrong has been belatedly righted!;)
Freya, thank you very much. I just might have to see if my muse can pull out a part II for this story.
Completely loved this story!! Time stood still when Ben found out who that injured man WAS lying in bed behind the door across the hall. Drove me to tears, excellent work and I would be beside myself should you post a sequel, I love this alternate prequel line!! How like Adam to save Little Joe so many times even when not knowing LJ is his unknown brother—Joe seems to incite protective and fatherly feelings from the Man in Black more than any other person in the history of Bonanza, besides women who always had romance working in their favor!! Masterfully wrote!! Thanks!!!
Miss Kitty, thank you for such an enthusiastic review. And I agree with your assessment of inciting protective feelings from Adam AND all the women fantasizing of a certain romance.
LornesLady, Welcome to the Library. Thank you for taking the time to read, and to leave a comment. I’m glad this reality worked for you, with the characters still being true to who we know and love.
As for a sequel, I do have a few scenes put to paper, but my muse is more active with other story ideas. Maybe someday Adam’s story will be told. Again, thank you.
I read t his story recently and found it to be a really interesting alternative – at first I did not think it would work but it was most interesting way to look at the family and how it could gel! It is a very original idea and actually I really enjoyed all the extra emotions it bought out especially a vulnerable and rather charming Joe facing a confident and grown up elder brother. It is also very exciting with so much happening and I just love all the different reactions and emotional play between our boys. It did in the end, great authenticity and works really well. I think there should be a sequel showing how Adam tells his story and adventures interspersed with Ben’s and Hoss.
This is a wonderfully imaginative story! I love the way you weave different motivations and various explanations throughout the tale. Great job.
Belle,
With so many stories being posted to the new library, I’m thrilled you chose to read one of my stories. Revelation was a fun story to write. Trying to be true to the characters, but also giving plausible reasons for this reality I chose to write. Now the boys can proceed with “A Rose for Lotta”.
Thank you!